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VAC 11 Judge Review:

It was a little awkward when the Ape Man appeared and I wasn’t sure what actions were going on as he grunted hahahahaha, but I assumed they were just stalking from a distance? I wasn’t sure who exactly appeared at the end to evacuate their guts or the other one with him. Nice grandpa character, but the others didn’t seem quite as defined as his. Great mixing and sound effects with some low ambient music. The plot was okay, but it seemed a little rushed for what it was. I would have liked to learn more about the feelings of these characters, maybe that contributes to why most of them didn’t seem as defined, since grandpa spoke the most. Overall, a good piece that I think needs more attention to character detail and some extra plot development. Good job!

VAC 11 Judge Review:

Hahahahahaha! Nice entry! That made me smile. Great story, great acting, perfect mixing to really provide a space. You wasted no second of time and always advanced the plot forward. But, I thought sometimes you advanced a bit too hastily as your voices talked over each other a lot, which is funny because a lot of people do the opposite. I just thought it sounded both natural and a tad unrealistic. I wonder if your call center guy did not have the phone effect, would he sound a little more similar to your caller voice? Maybe not, you did a good job of differentiating them while still having them both sound natural. Really great idea for the plot and a hilarious ending. I think that’s all I can say about this. Fantastic work!

VAC 11 Judge Review:

Well, you’ve definitely got three distinct characters. The mixing with the voices needed a lot of work; very boomy and bass heavy making it unclear. As much as hacking and coughing is fun for a crazy character, the fact that it took up a majority of the script was unnecessary. As for the plot, there was barely any to move along with. The beginning was nice to set up the general pretense, but then the actual execution of the action was confusing and actually I think it was just skipped over? I think they went in and then you cut to when they got back out. You just skipped the potential you set up for the whole first half. But, I did like the sound your characters, minus the excessive cackling. They just needed more of a somewhere to exist.

VAC 11 Judge Review:

I liked your banter in the beginning and how natural it sounded. The mixing was obviously off as it sounded out of place with the ambient street noise. When your Indian accent came in at the end, strangely enough it was somewhat hard to distinguish from your normal voice. A little pitch variation with one or the other could have helped differentiate. Also, with that end part I felt there was much more potential for it to be hilarious. Instead, it was kind of dull to me, but I could tell what you were trying to do. So that plot point needed work, but the rest of it before he chokes worked well. I really love conciseness, so I commend you for that. Overall, you did a nice job. Maybe a little extra character development and plot development. But good work!

AnalogByNature responds:

Thanks for your review & suggestions/advice, Zip!
I guess next time, a script would help

VAC 11 Judge Review:

Were they robbing...a house or a store? Weird if a store had a doorbell or weird if the first character was using the word customer for visitors to his house. Anyways, your range needed to be much more diverse. I could tell the difference between the characters, but they were still very similar to each other. Mixing was pretty good as everything was mostly clear. In general, I think some ambient sound effects would have really helped. I think I heard at some spots you were recording in one take while switching between voices, which is sort of a no-no hahahahaha. The plot was random at times, I think it could have been more concrete. Overall, this was okay. What would really help is practicing coming up with as distinct characters as you can. The more committed they are, the more invested your acting will sound. Good work!

Forserious responds:

It was a house. I think I went a little overboard wanting it to be random and ridiculous.

Thank you for listening and for the advice. I'll be more mindful of these things in the future.

VAC 11 Judge Review:

This one had me laughing the hardest, no question. I just loved how reserved you were with your voice and how uncomfortable it made me feel. Honestly, it was all just so awkward and terrible that I loved it. When you said it was none other than Miz Tentacles herself, I was on the floor laughing. Alright, but to be more serious, the mixing needed a lot of help. There was a lot of crackling and vocal pops, which could be slightly lessened by talking more fully and maybe not being too close to the mic. I think the acting was actually accurate to the mood and your voice just sounds so unique like that. Nice awkward music choice and a creepy soundscape at the end. You are just one of those anomalies that your weird, awful style just works for you, in my opinion. Though the plot was really random and unclear, I still liked that it was...random and unclear. Nice job!

VAC 11 Judge Review:

The first problem I recognize right off the bat is the introduction of a bunch of characters within the first ten seconds without giving much background. I think there’s a mom and a dad and then some amount of children that I can’t count hahahahaha. Wow, can I just say this sounds like a demented porno. I’m sorry, but I started laughing towards the end when the slurping began. But you know, I think that just shows you really know how to voice act agony lol. Anyways, after listening to all that, I felt like I had to assume what the plot was; vampiric family teaching their next of kin? It then makes me realize that a majority of this entry was just unnecessary noise. I wasn’t following a story more than I was forced to envision some predictable gore. Then your lack of vocal variation made it hard to differentiate characters; I got adults and then I got children and that was it. I think you really need to work with defining a character and also with a plot that advances without dragging on. But good job with your screams, the acting is in you hahaha. Nice work!

VAC 11 Judge Review:

The music was really distracting. I know that was part of the point of the plot, but it could have been executed better; mixed better with the voices. The humor was pretty blah to me, could have had more creativity. I do like how in your mixing, the voices were affected accordingly and were extreme enough that the difference could be made. But sometimes the voices, especially between Jim and the narrator, were very similar, and the others sounded like they were straying a bit. The pacing of the lines was really slow a lot of the time, which I think added to why the humor was dull. Your acting could also use a little more meat to it; it was also sort of dull. I do praise your effects and you had a solid idea for a plot, it just needs more work.

VAC 11 Judge Review:

Well technically, this wouldn’t be exactly the first deep one sighting, just the first reappearance hahahaha. Anyways, there seemed to be a basic two or three variations of voice, with slight differences between them. Because of that, the characters would have really blended if it weren’t for the difference in acting. A lot of the plot relied on the listener imagining what actions were taking place. Though the sound effects and the background voicing helped, I was still a little confused with what has happening, not to mention some fantasy vocabulary threw me off without much explanation. With mixing, the biggest issue was space. I think there could have been more reverb, not just in general, but some variation on it to represent space between characters and not just volume variation, for example when the deep ones are attacking and they’re supposed to be far away but then suddenly that main one approached and was really close up? Lastly, though your acting could be worked on to sound more real, it sounds like you knew what your characters were; you just need more exaggeration with some and then fine tuning with others. But, nice idea for a story and a great dramatic approach. Good work!

Tonash responds:

Thank you very much for the detailed review!

I will definitely take your words to heart and try to improve in the future! :D

VAC 11 Judge Review:

Good thing I read the pseudo-description, otherwise I wouldn’t have known it was in your mind. That explains why there was a lot of silence, the narratives must have mostly been going on in your head! Hahahahaha. The mixing was a huge problem because it was extremely difficult to understand what was being said. I immediately questioned who the two other characters were in reality as well as the location in reality. I understood the goblin humping his leg, but it sure didn’t sound like there was much trauma. Good vocal distinction between goblin and the main guy, but not much else interesting. The story was flat from what I could understand and the acting seemed quite dampened and unenthusiastic. I would first work on being able to sound as clear as possible first with your voice and then through help with the mixing. Also, think about a dialogue that’s got an even but quick pace and more clarity.

Jaggblade responds:

Thanks for reviewing. You've given me a few things to contemplate and improve on :D

Just an awkward clown that showed up late to the clown pile. I love to provide goofy-spook music but I'm open to anyone that challenges my comfort zone. Send me details of your lifestory when you get the chance!

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